This past week’s assignment was to write a scene about an “Inappropriate Response” coming from one (or more) characters.  And in a change of pace (or act of laziness?), we were critiqued not by our instructor, but by a fellow student.  I joke about the laziness part because it was actually a great exercise – get a different perspective as well as require us to analyze a scene written by someone else.

Here’s a link to my plainly titled assignment 5 – Inappropriate.

The student critique was focused solely on character objective, as that’s the overall emphasis of the course.  He (or could be a she, but for sake of not having to write / after everything, and since he is a shorter word, we’ll just say “he”) understood the objective of Damon, but not really of Eric.  And to be honest, I’m not sure what my intent was for Eric’s objective, I guess I figured he was more of just a nincompoop rather than somebody with a specific goal.

The critic offered up the possibility that Eric was jealous of Damon and wanted his life, which I think makes for a great premise to the scene, and really would have allowed me to explore a number of different moments between the two (such as Eric waiting for Damon to die, or hitting on Ashley in Damon’s presence).

Overall I think it had a positive start and could’ve really gone somewhere, I just didn’t quite take it there.